July 30

BTN Quarantine Questions

http://www.abc.net.au/btn/story/s4239957.htm

Lately on the news Johnny Depp has been accused for smuggling his two dogs in Pistol and Boo. Also what you have to do if you want to take an animal or plant to Australia.

It all started when agricultural minister Barnaby Joice found out that Depp smuggled the dogs and said he would have to take them back to California or the would be put down. Before an animal can travel to a country they have to go through biosecurity.  It’s a progress that makes sure your animal/plant doesn’t have diseases or can threaten specie an example of this is cane toads and how they are threatening plenty of species including dogs. The thing that Depp had done wrong here was skipping quarantine. Quarantine is where your animal spends time at a facility to double check that it didn’t catch a disease on the trip while doing this they have to be kept in complete isolation. But how did he skip quarantine? my theory is since he was flying on a private jet then he wouldn’t necessarily stop at the airport, his plane would be to small so he skips all that and smuggles his dog through quarantine. Lastly It said Johnny Depp had skipped quarantine but had he skipped biosecurity?

July 29

100 Word Challenge Week #38

It all started when I was feeling lucky one day and entered a 1 million dollar lottery but the ticket costed a hefty amount of cash, around $100 each but I bought 10 of them! It sounded like a good idea at first but then I influenced my friend to do the same. He as well bought 10 tickets. We were sitting on the couch waiting for the lottery numbers to be drawn. Unfortunately for me I had lost, but my friend had won! I looked in disgust as he celebrated for the whole night. I will never do this again.

July 26

BTN Pluto

http://www.abc.net.au/btn/story/s4274304.htm

This article was about the New Horizons mission/ship and how it flew by Pluto also information about Pluto itself.

After the New Horizons flew by Pluto scientists and operators are thinking of the New Horizons exploring the Kuiper belt in our Solar System. They said that Earth would be a basketball and the Moon would be a tennis ball 7.5 metres away but Pluto would be golf ball 80km away so if my calculations are correct then Pluto would be 10667X the distance from the Moon to the Earth. The New Horizons was on top of a rocket (probably to get it to space first) and only the size of a piano so this might be the reason it was the fastest aircraft launched by Nasa and can go up to 60 000kmph. Pluto was first discovered by an American Astronomer Clyde Tombow in 1930. My only question is what the circumference of the Kuiper belt is? (They probably don’t know this because they haven’t explored it yet).

July 21

100 Word Challenge Week #37

pluto cartoon

 

One day I was trying to spot my fellow planets but I saw something different. A electronic probe coming straight towards me on the side it read “New Horizons”. What does that mean? I thought. I thought it was the moon very far away and was liberated by people and that was written on him but then it came closer. It was unusual because it was smaller than me so it wasn’t the moon. I tried to chat with it but it didn’t say much. After two days of trying to talk, it just flew past. It’s so lonely up here.

 

July 20

The Wish

My telephone rung with my favourite ringtone. I liked the ringtone because it made the phone seem alive. When I was going to go check my messages I saw my profile picture, I had blonde hair and was very slim-looking good! I read my message and it stated, “Look for the wish seed in the sewers.” I guessed in a flash that this must be the famous wish seed that grants you a wish. Now, the last time I went down the sewers tears fell down my face when I vomited. I hated that stinky, disgusting, slimy place-but if there’s a possibility of adventure and treasure, I can’t resist, so off I went.

When I got to the sewers I saw a floating object, the wish seed. Well it did look like a seed but it didn’t look that spectacular. I heard a scream and saw another kid down at the other end of the sewers. I grabbed the seed and ran. I bolted for the ladder and rushed home. As I panted on my bed sweat trickled down my forehead but for some reason the sweat was salty like how it usually is. As I took a rest I observed the seed, but how did it work?

So the next day after school I invited my friends over to have a look. One of my friends said put it in a genie pot and it will summon a genie. My friends realised that maybe I was trying to trick them so I showed them my messages but mysteriously there were none. After that my friends stormed out in anger so I whispered to myself, “I wish that my friends would believe me.” My friends rushed back inside my room and said, “We saw a light coming from your room.” “We want to make a wish too!” the other one said. In selfish desperation for wishes I said, “NO! There might be limited wishes!” “You selfish scum!” they all said at once and they left.

An hour later I saw heaps of my friends outside of the door-everyone had been talking, and now everyone wanted my wish seed. A year 8 leader just pushed me out of the way and headed to my room. I lunged towards my room but the boy had already claimed the seed and once again just pushed me out of the way. I looked outside and it seemed they were fighting for the seed. Some smart people immediately fled.

The last people standing were people with a leader who happily shared the seed around. Then I thought, “Why weren’t my friends like that, why did they fight to get it from me?” I went to their house and asked why. They responded, “You are no good and selfish!” I convinced them to help me retrieve the seed by saying that I would share it.

The kids who had taken the seed had come up with a system they called “a wish for the day.” So they had hidden the seed in a box. We snuck in and took it out, but when we looked behind us a rush of adrenaline came. The whole mob was behind us. As we ran the only place we could think of going to was back to the sewers again- “ugh!” So we went in and we seemed to have lost them. I shared the seed around for everyone to have a wish (we each wished in private). Until we saw the same kid I had seen when I had first obtained the seed. I gave him an evil eye. But when I looked at my friends they stared and sighed indicating for me to share it with him as well.

So I did. But then I wondered why my friends hadn’t fought for it. Then I remembered them calling me selfish, and my mind rung. I was being selfish by taking it for myself and not even sharing it. Finally I had realized. If I wanted my friends to like me I had to share. In the future I am planning to share with my friends so this will never happen again.

Reflection

In this activity I learned how to finish of a narrative by making the character change somehow. I also took Antony’s advice and make my stories a bit more simple and work more on making description and the character rather than having to spend the whole time putting my ideas in there. I am particularly proud of how I have improved from the last story because last time I was stressed and had to rush everything or I would have an unfinished story but this one went much more smoothly and I didn’t stress as much I am also proud of the different vocabulary and making the character change.

My Feedback

I love the way you have worked hard to create a story where the character changes his personality because of what happens when trying to solve the problem of the story. You enjoy using interesting vocabulary and phrases which help make your writing interesting for the reader.

You like to have lots of ideas and action in your stories, but if this is the type of story you want to write you have to be careful to make sure every step is clear. Notice how I have put in a few words and phrases here and there throughout your story, just to make it really clear what is happening. When you reread and edit your writing really look out for this.

Finally, be careful with your punctuation of talking. For instance, if you start the speech in the middle of a sentence you need a comma before the talking marks start- e.g: In selfish desperation for wishes I said, “NO! There might be limited wishes!”